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CRFT snippet #1: In my feelings

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The following is unedited and all grammatical errors are mine:

Ramses Alexander Page III looks back and forth between Marcus and the identical mirror twin Ray, an idea forming in his mind. There was a theory he wanted to test ever since he read about it in the science journals and here, was a pair of twins that unknowingly presented themselves for the opportunity.Β 

“Salut!” he enthusiastically greeted Ray as the Auburn head teen sat down to lunch at their favorite table in the spacious cafeteria. It took a while to learn how to tell the twins apart although sometimes it was still hard especially when they were wearing identical expressions. “How’s Romance Lit club?”

Ray genuinely smiles. “I am happy with the last turn out. This week we’ll be looking at Pablo Neruda’s work.” he looked at the Egyptian-Greek with earnest. “Would you like to join?”

“Poetry is not my thing.” Ramses realized that Marcus was wrapping up his pep talk with the football team of which he was the captain of. He had to move fast. “So, I read something interesting about identical twins.” When he had Ray’s curious attention, he asked, “If I were to hit you, would Marc feel it?”

“No, it doesn’t work that way. I… hey!” Ray cried out as Ramses slaps him on the arm just as Marcus proceeds to sit.Β 

“You didn’t feel that?” Ramses asked the ever-scowling twin.Β 

“Feel what?” Marcus gruffly asks tearing into the beef sandwich.

Ramses shrugs and ate lunch with his buddies in silence wondering how to finish carrying out his theory without Marcus killing him. He closed his aquamarine eyes, count to ten and swiftly kicks Marcus in the shin. The result was instant. The twins let out a howl of pain and automatically reached for the offended area at the same time. As they were facing each other, it looked like they were mirroring each other.

“So that’s what they meant by mirror identical!” Ramses mused out loud. “And now that I have the answer to my theory, I shall be on my way.” He makes to get up, but Marcus grabs him by the lapel of his school jacket and yanks him back down in the chair just as Ray starts ranting about painful shins.

“What is wrong with you? Do you know that the tibia is protected by a thin layer of skin? That actually hurt, you idiot!”

“You hurt my brother, you pay,” Marcus sneers.

“But I kicked you, not Ray!”

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Myth or Fact: Do twins share each other’s pain?

Although this has been proven as fiction by TONS of experiments conducted over the years, there are some accounts of identical twins who have felt each other’s pain. Sally Keeble felt her identical twin sister’s labor pains and it wasn’t a walk in the park for her. Identical twins Angela King and Elena Gatt also insisted that they share each other’s pain ranging from accidents to morning sickness. When Angela was 8, she had her tonsils removed. Meanwhile, Elena was unaware and stayed with her grandmother screamed at the exact moment Angela’s tonsils were removed.Β 

Science can’t explain everything nor was everything meant to be explained when it comes to identical twins and their feelings. A twin connection is simply unique to that of a normal sibling.Β 

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29 thoughts on “CRFT snippet #1: In my feelings”

  1. Oh wow, I almost thought it’s going to be crazy rich Asians, but loved the French surprise. DD, this is a very cool idea, Are you writing a book? I even went to see if this already a book was written by you. Let me know!

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    1. Luda, thank you for your lovely comment! I am so happy that you like the snippet! πŸ’™πŸ˜„Actually, I’m just writing for the fun of it. I have no intention to write any books at the moment. Thanks so much again. πŸ’™

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    1. Haha! Ramses is kind of a kook. He does things on impulse without thinking it through. I am so happy that you like it, me dearest! Thank you for reading. πŸ’™πŸ˜„

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    1. I’m not working on a book. I’m just free writing at the moment. Thank you for reading and for the nice comment! πŸ˜„

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  2. Love the idea of twins feeling each other’s pain. This was a great snippet!! Keep them coming, Diana! One thing though (and this could just be my issue so please don’t feel like you need to make any changes): I kept thinking Ramses and Ray were the twins just because their names started with the same letter and I had to keep consciously reminding myself that the twins were actually Marcus and Ray. I don’t know if anyone else will have that problem, but I thought I should let you know of my slight confusion lol

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    1. Thank you, Jade! I’m glad that you like it. I’ll keep your thought in mind. At the moment, I am free writing, hence why I said it’s unedited. I’ll definitely rework my wording during edit. Thank you for the thought. πŸ˜„πŸ’™

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    1. Haha! Right! Ramses need to know his place, but Marc didn’t even care that he was hurt. He was concerned about Ray even though he didn’t get kicked! The boy cray cray. πŸ™„Thanks for stopping by to read and share feedback, chica. I appreciate it. πŸ’™

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